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The graph below sgives information about the percentage of the population in four asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below sgives information about the percentage of the population in four asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph provides data about the percentage of the
population
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 living in cities during the time period between 1970 and 2020 in four countries, located in the Asian region.
Also
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,
this
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 graph contains the possible phenomena for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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,
Malaysia
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had
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has
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 seen gradual growth and had the highest
population
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 till 2020 and is expected to hold the position
according to
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 the prediction.
On the contrary
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,
Thailand
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 had the second lowest
population
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 from the beginning which eventually saw a downfall, making it the city with the lowest percentage of
population
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 not only till 2020 but
also
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at the end
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 of 2040 as per the prophecy. During the timeline of 1970 to 2020, both
Malaysia
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 and
Philipines
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the Philipines
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 shared almost the same percentage of city-living people, 30% and just above 30%
consequently
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,
whereas
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Thailand
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 had a little shy of 20% and Indonesia had more than 10%
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of populations
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populations
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population
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.
At the end
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 of the timeline,
Malaysia
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 held the top position with a shy of 80%, followed by Indonesia,
Philipines
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the Philipines
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 and
Thailand
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 with 50%, over 40% and a bit short of 30%
cosecutively
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consecutively
. The leaderboard remained the same even after 2040, indicating
Malaysia
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, Indonesia, Philipines and
Thailand
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 with almost 80%, 60%, 50% and 45% consecutively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, malaysia, thailand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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