The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year.

The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year.
The diagrams illustrate how much money was spent by
students
in the UK in different sectors,
as well as
the sources of their
income
.
Overall
, most of the
students
have more than one source of
income
with Student
loan
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loans
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, family and part-time
job
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jobs
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being used by more than 50% of them. Rent was a category where
this
group spent more than half of their total monthly
income
. The Rent was the most expensive spender for
this
social group with 385. In comparison to it, the young people didn't spend that much on travel, socialising and bills. These numbers are 52, 64,
69
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and 69
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respectively.
Amount
Correct article usage
The amount
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of money spent on food is double (about 124). Other
spendings
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spending
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were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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about 91.
Number
Correct article usage
The number
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one source of
income
was
Student
Correct article usage
a Student
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loan with 80%. Family and part-time jobs placed 2nd and 3rd respectively with around 65%. Less than half of all
students
used savings and bank
overdraft
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overdrafts
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. Grants and fundings
was
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were
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used only by around 40% of
students
, which was the lowest number on the chart.
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