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Nowadays countries are reducing the cost of air travel as compared to the past. While some argue this will result in a negative outcome, others believe it will be positive. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Use relevant examples.

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In
this
 contemporary world, in some
countries
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countries,
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 the price of
air
travelling
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travel
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 is decreased in comparison to the past. Some people
believed
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believe
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 that
this
bring
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brings
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 about drawbacks
while
 others, myself included, subscribe to the view that it will be beneficial. On the one hand, it is claimed that
lower
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the lower
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 cost of
air
travelling
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travel
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 causes
rise
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a rise
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 in
air
 traffic
due to
 the
increas
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increase
 in usage of
this
 method of travelling. Some individuals argue that if the price of plane tickets
become
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becomes
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 cheaper, people who can afford
this
 method
for
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of
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 travelling will
be increased
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increase
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 and
this
 lead to
air
 traffic.
Furthermore
, lower
cost
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costs
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 for
the
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apply
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air
 travel increase demand
of
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apply
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it
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apply
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and airlines should allocate more
planes
. As far as
planes
 use fossil fuel, using more
planes
cause
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causes
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 more
air
 pollution. For
axample
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example
, in some international agreements about
environment
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the environment
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,
planes
introduced
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were introduced
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 as one of the most significant sources of
air
 pollution.
On the other hand
, it is considered that cheaper
air
 travel can increase the quality of
peopel's
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people's
 vacations. They can use
planes
 without spending
considerable
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a considerable
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 amount of
money
,
also
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and also
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, spend their spare
money
 on various activities.
For instance
, individuals who consider
particular
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a particular
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 amount of
money
 for their holidays, can spend less amount of
money
 on transformation and use their
money
 for
entertainments
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entertainment
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 or shopping.
Moreover
,
costumers
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customers
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 for various businesses associated with
air
travell
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travel
 will increase,
therefore
, they can expand their businesses. To illustrate, some airlines which are popular buy new
planes
 every year in order to
satisfying
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satisfy
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 their
costumers
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customers
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. In conclusion,it is claimed that
lower
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the lower
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 cost of plane tickets leads to
rise
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a rise
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 in the usage of
this
 method,
therefore
,
air
 pollution and
air
 traffic will happen.
However
, I
stronly
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strongly
 agree with the view that it can improve the quality of
peopel's
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people's
 vacations and
asisst
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assist
 companies in
air
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the air
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 travelling field to develop their businesses.
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task achievement
Ensure the argumentation on both views is balanced by providing more elaboration on how cheaper air travel might specifically lead to negative outcomes.
language use
Minimize spelling and grammar errors to enhance readability (e.g., 'increas', 'costumers', 'peopel', 'travell').
coherence and cohesion
The introduction clearly sets up the discussion of both views and includes a personal stance, providing clarity and directness.
coherence and cohesion
The essay provides strong conclusions that summarize your main points effectively.
task achievement
Relevant examples are used to illustrate each point, adding depth to the argument.

Your opinion

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