In some areas of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

These days, authorities
imposed
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a ban on youngsters, which
restrict
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their free movement after a designated
time
unless they are accompanied by their guardians.
However
, I hold a neutral view
on
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this
approach, which is elaborated in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, those who advocate
this
trend assert that It will save
teenagers
from bad influences. In fact, usually, youth have less wisdom to make out between good and bad company. They find wrong acts
such
as drinking, smoking, night outs etc very attractive
,
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because they want to enjoy their life to the fullest. But
such
laws can
barred
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teenagers
from indulging
into
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bad activities that generally happen in the evening hours.
Thus
, implementing a ban could be a useful
wayout
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way
to prevent
teenagers
from bad company.
On the other hand
, those who are against
this
measure opine that it can hinder students from their daily chores. Indeed, a few
teenagers
do
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time
jobs, in order to,support their studies financially. Most of the youngsters do
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time
work till late
night
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and generally, they are not accompanied by anyone, especially parents.
For example
, in the US, students follow the
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time
job culture very often, because they want to become independent.
Therefore
, restricting their free passage is not an advisable trend.
To sum up
, undoubtedly, a check on
youngsters
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movement
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in
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the
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night can protect them from unlawful activities, but it could
also
stop them from becoming financially independent.
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task achievement
Try to expand on the examples and reasons provided for each perspective to create a more comprehensive argument. For instance, elaborate on how curfews specifically prevent bad influences or hinder students' responsibilities.
coherence cohesion
While the essay presents two viewpoints, connecting each argument to its corresponding paragraph could enhance clarity. Consider using linking words like 'Firstly,' 'On the contrary,' or 'In addition' to clearly distinguish and connect ideas.
task achievement
Include specific examples or personal experiences to support both arguments more thoroughly, illustrating how curfews impact teenagers based on real-life situations or statistics.
task achievement
The essay presents a balanced viewpoint, discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of imposing curfews on teenagers.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion effectively frame the discussion, providing a neutral stance and a recap.
task achievement
The essay uses relevant vocabulary such as 'wisdom,' 'bad influence,' 'part-time jobs,' and 'financial independence,' which demonstrates a good understanding of the topic.

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