The bar chart shows information about the favorite subiects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subiects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
This
bar graph depicts
a
Correct article usage
apply
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data from two different schools about
students
'
favorite
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favourite
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subjects.
Overall
, the most likely class for
school
A is Sport which
gain
Wrong verb form
gained
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36
votes
,
while
the least is
Craft
and Drawing with 4
students
,
on the contrary
,
school
B
higher vote
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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for
Craft
Correct article usage
the Craft
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/ Drawing class of 25
student
Change to a plural noun
students
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. the lowest voted subject for
school
B
was Science having 2
votes
.
Additionally
, Social Science have 16
votes
in total, 10 (
school
B
), and 6 from
the
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apply
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another
school
,
although
for the aggregate lower subject is Science with 11
votes
. Language
have
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has
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5
students
from
school
A
while
school
B
have about 2 doubles with 18
vote
Fix the agreement mistake
votes
show examples
.
On the other hand
, the
most
Correct quantifier usage
apply
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two classes in aggregate
is
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are
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(Sport), and (
Craft
/ Drawing) respectively. 41
students
love the Sport class
while
5 of them
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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from
school
B
,
whereas
29
students
like
Craft
/Drawing.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, school, votes, craft, b with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • favorite subjects
  • popularity
  • comparison
  • significant differences
  • similar levels of interest
  • subject preference
  • curriculum
  • facilities
  • impact
  • trend
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