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The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Consumer Spending on Travel (US $ Billion)

The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Consumer Spending on Travel (US $ Billion)
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the chart gives us
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 idea about the Top Ten
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 with the highest spending on
travel
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 in
year
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 2014. China is on the top of the
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 with the highest consumer spending on
travel
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 and Taiwan is seen least spending on
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. We have 10
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 with us let's understand in detail which country spends the most and which spends the least. As we can clearly see
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China comes on top of the
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 with the highest consumer spending on
travel
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, As we can see china
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spent almost 105
Billion
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 US
Dollars
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 in
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 2014. Coming to number 2nd which is
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 States is seen
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 spent almost 81 to 85
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. We can see another Country very similar to
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 States in the spent amount which is
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 similar to the figure of 81 to 83
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. The United States and Germany both are similar in their statistics for consumer spending on
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. Coming to 4th on the
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 which is the United Kingdom we can see a very huge difference in
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spending as compared to before 4
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. United Kingdom has spent less than 60
Billion
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 2014. Singapore comes in the 5th
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 of the
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 with a very huge difference again as compared to
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 Kingdom with almost a huge amount of difference. Singapore has spent around 23 to 25
Billion
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. 6th
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 comes South Korea and 7th
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 comes Hong Kong with
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 similar amount of 20
Billion
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 in their
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 spending. 8th
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 comes India with spending nearly 12 to 15
Billion
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. 9th
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 comes Malaysia with
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 spending of almost 8 to 12
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 with the least spending comes Taiwan with almost 10
Billion
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. As we can see
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the top 4
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 on the
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more
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 as compared to the rest of the
countries
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, maybe
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 because people in the top 4
countries
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 prefer to
travel
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 by
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car which has a high cost
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 transportation because of their expensive fuel
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. Rest
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 people may prefer the cheap mode of transportation which includes Train, Buses, walking etc.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, travel, list, billion, dollars, place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 6 times.
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