The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugarcane, summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons were relevant.

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The provided diagram illustrates the process of production of making

sugar

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from

sugarcane

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sugarcane

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is produced for a year up to half a year, going

throughout

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7 processes, at the final stage it is dried and cooled,

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and finally

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finally

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sugar

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is manufactured and it cycles.

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sugarcane

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is cultivated between 12 and 18 months. After growing up,

sugarcane

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is harvested either truck comes and collects it or workers do it by hand. In the third process, a machine is made up so that it oppresses that and generates juice.

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the fourth stage,

juice

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the juice

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is purified with the help of

limestone

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a limestone

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filter.

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, juice is brought to evaporate in order to switch to syrup.

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, there are still

sugar

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crystals in

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the syrup

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, so

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a centrifuge

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is used to separate crystals from

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the syrup

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.Eventually, as soon as it is dried up and cooled,

sugar

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is produced and the cycle starts again.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

148 words

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The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugarcane, summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons were relevant.

Today, more and more people want things instantly (e.g: goods, service, news). Why is this? Is it a positive or negatibe development?

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ou are looking for a part-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter: - introduce yourself  - explain what sort of job you would like  - say what experience and skills you have