The graph below depicts the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie charts below shows how electricity is used in an average home in the same country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make cmparison where relevant.

The graph below depicts the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie charts below shows how electricity is used in an average home in the same country. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make cmparison where relevant.
The given graph illustrates units of electricity used throughout the hours of the day in Britain, both Winter and Summer.
In addition
, electro
domestics
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domestic
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usage percentages are shown in the pie chart at the bottom.
Overall
, probably
due to
the lower temperatures and the shortening of the day in winter, electricity consumption is way more than in summer.
Furthermore
, it has a fluctuant trend showing a peak of 40000 around three in the morning, before a deep drop from six to nine a.m., reaching around 30000. Afterwards, there is a moderate rise, but at 21 there is a spike of around 50000 units.
On the other hand
, in summer there is an
overall
steady pattern, with only two peaks at 20000 units, one between 12 to 15 and another at roughly 22:30. Regarding how
this
energy is utilized, the chart shows heating water and rooms involves more than half of all the energy resources.
Next,
there are ovens, kettles and washing machines at about 17 points percentages.
Lastly
, Lighting,TV and radio
along with
vacuum cleaners, food mixers and electrical tools put to use 15% of electricity.
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