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Write a letter to your friend in another country where you like to visit for the holidays. In your letter, you should: •explain your travel plans •describe the interesting places you plan to visit •ask for suggestions for sightseeing options.

#friend #country #visit #holidays #•explain #travel #plans #•describe #places #plan #•ask #suggestions #options
Dear Friends, Hope you are doing well. I'
m
 very happy to tell you that
i'
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I'm
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m
 planning to visit
london
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London
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 for my holiday. I'
m
 more
existed
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excited
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 for
this
 upcoming vacation. After my final exam, I'
m
 planning to come
on
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in
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december
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the
 first week. I haven't booked a
flight
 ticket yet,
flight
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the flight
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 price is very high now. Once
flight
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the flight
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 price
get
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 down, I will book immediately on
dec
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Dec
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 5. My plan
to
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is to
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 stay there for three weeks. One of my favourite
destination
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, I want to explore all the famous
place
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places
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especially
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, especially
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 Elifel
tower
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Tower
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. My budget for
this
 trip is about 3500$ which
including
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 all the coverage( food and stay). I
also
 heard from
old
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an old
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 colleague that
december
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December
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 is
best
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the best
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 time to explore the place in
london
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London
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.You can suggest
me
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to me
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 some places under my budget so that we can
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have alot
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alot
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a lot
 of memories. I'
m
 waiting for your response. Please
response
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 to
this
 letter as soon as possible so that
i
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I
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 can plan
accordingly
 and book the
flight
 ticket. Your Lovely, Dhivya Ravi
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grammar
Watch out for spelling and grammar errors to enhance clarity, such as 'existed' which should be 'excited'.
content
Remember to mention some specific places in London that you plan on visiting besides the intended 'Elifel tower'.
structure
The letter includes a clear greeting and closing, which contributes to coherence and cohesion.
tone
The tone of the letter is friendly and well-suited for writing to a friend, achieving task appropriateness.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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