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The table below shows the changes in some household types in Canada from 1984 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the changes in some household types in Canada from 1984 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table depicts
a
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the
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 number of people who live in households in Canada over a 26-year
period
 from 1984 to 2020. There are two major groups, which are “One person” and “
One-Family
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One family
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”.
Moreover
, the One-Family group is
then
 separated into four
sub-group
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sub-groups
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. In general, it is evident,
the
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that the
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 “Dependent Children” sub-category dominates throughout the
period
,
while
 the “Lone parent” group is frequently reported
having
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as having
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 the
least
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lowest
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 percentages, except having equal figures in 2014 and 2020
to
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for
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One
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The
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 person category. Examining the One person household type, the figure increased progressively from 6% in 1984 to 11% in 2004, before having a constant number for the next 16 years at 12%. Looking at the One-family households, the No children category experienced significant increases starting from 19% in 1984 until it reached stagnation starting from 2014 to the end of
period
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the period
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 at 25%.
Moreover
, there are two other groups that experienced similar
trend
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trends
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 with the exact years of stagnation, which are
Non-dependent
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the Non-dependent
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 children and Lone parent
category
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categories
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 that
being
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apply
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constant after
reached
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reaching
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 9% and 12%, respectively.
Furthermore
, the Dependent children group saw a gradual
decreased
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, starting from 52% at the beginning of the
period
, and
ended
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ending
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 with 36% in 2020.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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