The graph below shows the percentages of people in four age groups who had been to the cinema more than once a month, in the period between 2000 and 2011.

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information about the data of a group of individuals

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different four

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groups who had been to the cinema more the once a month , in the years 2000 to 2003 . From an

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perspective , it can be clearly seen that

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beginning of the

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a group of people who went to

cinema

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the cinema

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were

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experienced a downward trend.

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adolescence showed an upward trend throughout the

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. Both rates had some fluctuations.

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adults

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had a lower rate , it outraced adolescence

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of the

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. Commencing with the 15-24 teenagers in the year 2003 it reached the peak of about 58% the rate increased sharply throughout the

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, 35 and cover hitting a low - point with average 13% in the year 2003. In the years 2000 - 2003 adults

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the highest percentage, both exceeding 30% . 25-35 had slightly lower figures around 25% a quarter. 15-24 in

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year there was a sharp decline in 2000 it dropped arriving back at the result of the 39% .