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Write a letter to your friends. In your letter: ● Thank them for the holiday and the photos. ● Explain why you didn’t write earlier. ● Invite them to come and stay with you.

#friends #holiday #photos #didn’t
Dear friends, I am writing to express how blessed I am to have friends like you who are always there in the good and the bad times. I would like to tell
that
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you that
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 I never had a vacation
this
 fun and
enjoying
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, and
this
 was only possible because of you guys.
Also
, a big thank you to all for sending me the photos even before I asked you all.
Although
 I am a little late to write back to everyone but the thing was I
uregntly
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urgently
 had to go to Delhi to help my brother in getting admission
in
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to
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 the top school. As he is younger and
do
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does
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 not know much so I had to make sure he can do everything easily. Though I can not thank everyone enough
so
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apply
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just to show my love and appreciation I want to invite all of you here at my home where we can play some games
while
 having
yummy
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a yummy
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 dinner from some good restaurant even you can stay at my place so we can more fun. I will be waiting to hear from you, my
buddys
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buddy
buddies
. Regards Simran
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a distinct idea to improve clarity.
Task Response
Provide more specific details about the invitation, such as potential dates, to make it more complete.
Task Achievement
The letter maintains a friendly and engaging tone throughout, which is suitable for a letter to friends.
Coherence & Cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately warm and personal, enhancing the overall tone of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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