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Band 2.5

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

#summarise #information #features #comparisons
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The maps
demonstreates
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demonstrate
demonstrates
 the changes
of
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in
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a
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the
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 Happy Valley
Shoping
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Shopping
 Center between 1982 to 2012. It is
a
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apply
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clearly seen that there was considerable development of the Happy Valley
Shoping
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Shopping
 Center.
The most
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Most
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 notably the lake was disappeared and replaced by furniture retail.
According to
Linking Words
 the first
map
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map,
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 there was a lake which was surrounded the many trees and entrance the was
lobby
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a lobby
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area
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 between
coffee
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a coffee
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 shop and toilets,
in
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and in
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 the center there was
entertainment
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an entertainment
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area
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 under the food
store
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. In the east of the
building
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building,
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 there were
sports
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a sports
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store
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,
electronic
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an electronic
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store
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 and
furniture
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a furniture
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store
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. In the
north
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North
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 of the building under the entertainment
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area
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area,
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 there were 4
elevator
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elevators
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 and stairs for the second floor. In the second picture, the parking lot, coffee shop and lobby
area
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was
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were
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 destroyed
of
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on
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 the map in 2012. The furniture retail was constructed
replace
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to replace
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 the lake. The food
store
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 changed the sports
store
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 and electronics
store
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, meanwhile
toilet
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the toilet
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 and entertainment
area
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 still
..
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.
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to revise the essay to include clear introduction and conclusion sentences that effectively frame your report.
coherence cohesion
Improve sentence clarity by reducing fragmented sentences; ensure each sentence communicates a complete idea.
task achievement
Use clearer structures to compare the changes over the years, ensuring that major changes are clearly distinguished.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and mention details where relevant to enhance comprehension and response completion.
task achievement
The essay covers a comparative overview of the maps, making clear references to major changes such as the disappearance of the lake.
coherence cohesion
The essay demonstrates an attempt to organize content chronologically, providing a structured view of developments.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Pattern
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparison
  • Relationship
  • Correlation
  • Significant
  • Implication
  • Prediction
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