Some people think that the environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. discuss both these views and give your own opinion. as

Some would think that surrounding
problems
should be resolved on a global
scale
or it is convenient to solve nationally. I believe that it would be
betterto
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better to
make a deal with
issues
by
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on
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global
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a global
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scale
because it will be convenient to make
right
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the right
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decision
of
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all
problems
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the problems
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of certain
countries
that need an aim about environmental
issues
.
While
solving
problems
nationally it gives you more opportunities to be private and be responsible
of
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solution. On the one hand,
benefits
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of
solution
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the solution
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in
appropriate
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an appropriate
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way
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way,
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it
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apply
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is
worldwide
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a worldwide
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scale
to the environmental problem. By collaborating they can support each other and be useful in the future for
common
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goal.
Furthermore
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it makes
easier
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it easier
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to solve hard
problems
such
as climate
changing
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, pollution, global warming from fossil fuels, poor governance and food waste.
For example
,
Paris
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the Paris
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Agreement on climate change. It was adopted in 2015,
brought
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and brought
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together almost two hundred
countries
.
On the other hand
, solving
problems
privately shows
liability
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the liability
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of these
countries
. By solving nationally they show their independence of their life by
this
they take full responsibility
of
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tackling
issues
.
For example
, some private governments banned using
single-plastic
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single plastic
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bottles. I believe
this
method
countries
can keep regulations. In conclusion,
although
globalism can decrease responsibility of
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care of
problems
it is faster to solve
problems
correspondingly. It is recommended to address certain environmental
issues
on a global
scale
, especially those that are huge
problems
such
as climate change and pollution. By working together,
countries
can share resources and technology
that
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apply
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making it
easierto
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easier to
achieve significant progress.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence to improve logical structuring, and make logical connections more explicit between ideas.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are present, but aim to give a clearer, more concise statement of your position in the conclusion.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to illustrate your points and strengthen your arguments.
task achievement
You addressed both views of the task and gave your opinion, which shows a good understanding of the task requirements.
task achievement
The essay uses examples, such as the Paris Agreement, to illustrate points, which is beneficial to your argument.
coherence cohesion
Efforts were made to discuss solutions from both a national and global perspective, which enhances the depth of the discussion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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