Some believe that it is the responsibility of people to take care of the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of the environment. Discuss both views and state your opinion
People
have different views about whether
who are most care Correct word choice
apply
environment
.In my opinion
both inhabitants and administration have distinct roles to play in Add a comma
opinion,
enviromental
protection.
There are three key reasons why Correct your spelling
environmental
people
have more chances to help keeping
Wrong verb form
keep
environment
in Add an article
the environment
a
good condition.Correct article usage
apply
Firstly
and foremost is that
they should Verb problem
,
be
clean up Unnecessary verb
apply
the
places like lakes, Correct article usage
apply
oceans
.Correct word choice
and oceans
Fore
example,in the world Correct your spelling
For
such
country's
like Africa Change noun form
countries
havea
Correct your spelling
have a
have
problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
connect
Wrong verb form
connecting
water
Correct article usage
the water
environment
.Secondly
the green zones are Add a comma
Secondly,
declined
and Wrong verb form
declining
people
should be
plant more trees to Unnecessary verb
apply
increasing
the Wrong verb form
increase
amount
of green places.Change the quantifier
number
Finally
, the problems connect
with transportation.
Change the form of the verb
connected
Such
as ,if people
use transports
Fix the agreement mistake
transport
minimumm
as soon as possible the atmosphere Correct your spelling
minimum
started
being more disinfected,Wrong verb form
starts
besides
,more freshly
and cleaner.
Change the word
fresh
However
,on the other
hand
as well governments have opportunities to Add a comma
hand,
keeping
Wrong verb form
keep
environment
in Add an article
the environment
a
good form.
First of Correct article usage
apply
all
they have a chance to Add a comma
all,
fineng
when Correct your spelling
find
people
poisoned
Wrong verb form
poison
environment
.If Correct article usage
the environment
people
drop out rubbish after trip
Add an article
a trip
such
the governments should Correct quantifier usage
apply
be
give them Unnecessary verb
apply
fine
.Perhaps, another thing the administration Correct article usage
a fine
banning
is hunting animals like fishes who are very open .It Wrong verb form
banned
help
to Change the verb form
helps
decreasing
the proportion of Change the verb form
decrease
disappear
animals.
In conclusion,the governments and the Change the verb form
disappearing
people
have save
chances to Wrong verb form
saved
keeping
Wrong verb form
keep
environment
Correct article usage
the environment
clearly
and day by day becoming betterChange the word
clear
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure your introduction clearly outlines the main points you will discuss and provides a clear thesis statement. Consider stating explicitly what your personal opinion is in the introduction and link it effectively to your body paragraphs.
Coherence & Cohesion
Each paragraph should clearly relate to the question, be logically ordered and include clear topic sentences. Use linking words appropriately to maintain a coherent flow of ideas. Consider using words and phrases such as 'Firstly', 'In addition', and 'Finally'.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay should include a conclusion that summarizes the main points and restates your opinion. Ensure it's clear and aligned with your discussion.
Task Achievement
The essay addresses both viewpoints as required by the task.
Task Achievement
You attempt to justify points with examples and reasons.
Task Achievement
You've made a solid attempt to discuss both individual and governmental roles in environmental protection.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay shows a concern for logical development of ideas.
Coherence & Cohesion
You display an awareness of lexical resource with phrases like 'disinfected atmosphere'.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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