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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. ather. The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The given graph illustrates the site of
airport
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 at present and the plan for reconstruction for a year later.
Overall
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, there is a redevelopment for Gates.
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, there are changing places for the check-in and the café.
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, there will be built a café, an ATM, a care hire, shops, a bag drop, and a sky train.
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, there will be removed the walkway.
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, there will be
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changed
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the
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 security
passport
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, the
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 customs, the departures and the arrivals.
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, it is obvious that
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 there will be
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arrivals
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 the bottom right
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, there will be built a car hire,
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 ATM and a café in the middle right
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, there will be
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 renovated
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passport
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 customs
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 the right
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, there will be redeveloped the 8 Gates to 18 Gates. There will be removed the walkway and
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replaced by a sky train.
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, it is evident that the departures will not be modified
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bottom
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. There will be transformed the café and the check-in
moreover
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 there will be constructed a bag drop.
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,
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 there will be
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changed
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure all points are logically and precisely linked to provide clear progression and to avoid ambiguity.
Task Achievement
Include an overall statement that gives a clear overview of the most significant improvements.
Task Achievement
The essay includes detailed descriptions of the changes to be made in the airport redevelopment.
Task Achievement
The main features of the airport's current layout and future redevelopment are accurately identified and described.
Coherence and Cohesion
Good use of comparative phrases to highlight changes and differences.

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