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The Table shows how many international students study in Canada and the United States by country of origin. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The Table shows how many international students study in Canada and the United States by country of origin. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The chart above provides information about the
number
 of international
students
 from different countries
such
 as India,China,The
USA
 and
Canada
 that joined Universities in The
USA
 and
Canada
 from 2002 to 2003.
Overall
,the rate of
students
 from other
origines
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origins
 studying in
Canada
had
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fluctuation
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 in comparison to international
students
 in
U.S.Moreovere
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the U.S. Moreover
,the table indicates that
although
Canada
's rate was increasing, the
number
 of international
students
 in The
USA
 was higher
thann
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than
than in
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in canada
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canada
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Canada
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 during
this
 period.
Initially
, the total
number
 of
students
 who
joind
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joined
join
Canadian
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the Canadian
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 education system was 59,870 in 2002.In 2003 there was a significant increase in Chinese and Indian
students
 studying in
Canada
.
at
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 the end of the
period
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period,
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 the total
number
 became 70,004 which shows
the
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a
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 growth of 17%
compare
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compared
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 to
year
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the year
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 2002.
On the other hand
,The
USA
 started at 581,600 in total in 2002 and continued with
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a slightly
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slightly
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 rise in some nations except for
students
 from India which experienced -
9
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a 9
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% decrease
therefore
 the total
number
 of pupils attending U.S schools in 2003 was 592,230 which depicts about 2%
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