The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from 

sugar cane. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and 

make comparisons where relevant.
The first line
graph
illustrates the percentage of households that own electrical
appliance
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appliances
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such
as Washing machines, Refrigerators and Vacuum cleaners in the
time
frame 1920 to 2019.
Additionally
, the second line
graph
demonstrates the number of hours of housework per week spent per household in one territory in the same
time
frame.
Overall
, the ownership of electrical appliances grew in the trajectory.
However
, the
time
spent on housework for each family declined in the same span. The percentage of households owning washing machines was 40 percent in 1920 and gradually
this
ownership grew to reach 70 until 1960 followed by a decline to hit nearly 60 in 1960.
Then
after it progressively grew to attain about 75.
While
the rate of families owning Refrigerators had a significant and steady increase to hit 100
percent
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per cent
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in 2000 and there is no data for 2019 for
this
appliance.
Similarly
, vacuum cleaner ownership of families had the same trend
to attain
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of attaining
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100 percent in 2000 and maintaining
this
level for 2019.
In contrast
, the second line
graph
shows a
graph
, the
time
spent on doing housework moderately declined from 50 hours in 1920 to 10 hours in 2019.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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