The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps
illustrates
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an industrial neighborhood in the town
Norbiton
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of Norbiton
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and the
future
elevation for which is planned for
future
references
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. The
area
is located alongside a river with limited agricultural places as it is surrounded by only factories.
However
,
this
area
will be developed in many aspects of the
area
, from the buildings to the
road
map itself.
Firstly
, It could be seen that the river will have a bridge going over, leading to
a
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big housing.
On the other hand
, the
road
will be expanded on the
northern west
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northwest
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of the
circle shaped
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circle-shaped
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road
leading to another housing.
Besides
that, another
circle shapes
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circle-shaped
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road
would be
design
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of
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the south side of the
area
.
In addition
, there are new agricultural buildings
such
as shops and the medical centre that will
be surrounding
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the
circle shaped
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circle-shaped
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road
located in the middle. On the east side of the
area
, there would be a school and
playgroud
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playground
near a housing district. The factories would
also
be diminished and changed to housing ranging in size.
To conclude
, the development is shown to have a major shift in the purposes and
future
citizens in the
area
. Perhaps in the
future
, the
area
would
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be more
comforted
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comfortable
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for families with
childrens
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children
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as there will be a school district nearby other than for industrial workers.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words future, area, road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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