The pie charts show the revenue sources and expenditure of a children’s charity in the USA in one year.

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The pies illustrate how much money spent and receive kid’s charity over 12-month in the America. Looking at

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, it is readily apparent that, the amount of revenue and expenditures more or less the same as shown in the graphs. The incoming sources is superior in donated food,

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the outlays one prevails in program services.

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the chart, donated food reported as the dominant revenue accounted for 86%

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the community contributions was nearly 10.4%.

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, program revenue came in third place in profits just over 2%

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the other resources had a sum of 0.8%. One striking feature is that, the program services lead the way regarding of expenditure items, with 96%.

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, just over 3% was used for fundraising (2%) and Management and general (1,6%).

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The pie charts show the revenue sources and expenditure of a children’s charity in the USA in one year.

In order to solve traffic jams and home problems, people believe that it can be solved by removing companies, factories and employees to country side. To what extend do you agree?

In many towns and cities,large shopping malls are replacing small local shops.Do you this is a positive development?Give your reasons and examples.

In many countries today, if people want to find work, they have to move away from their friends and their families

Nowadays, older people who need employment have to complete with younger people. What problems do this cause, and what are the solutions?