The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2006 to the present.

The line graph illustrates the amount of male and female
readers
in one of the bibliotheca at Starmouth School over a four yearperiod. One striking feature is that, it seems sharply increase at
readers
by girl,
while
the boy
readers
firstly
was slightly increase and
at the end
it took drop during the given time
period
. At the beginning of the
period
, boys had the largest
number
of bibliography read with just over 50 examples. It continued to grow until it reach a peak in 2011 at approximately with 100 books,
while
from
this
period
the
number
of male
readers
slightly declined. The
number
of both male and female
readers
was nearly 100 in 2011.
In contrast
, the the quantity of lady
readers
has a significant upward climbing throughout the
period
and
this
trend reached 140 reading samples
at the end
of the time frame. It is notable that by 2012, female
readers
surpassed male
readers
in
number
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