The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015

The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015
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The table illustrates the percentage of senior management roles held by
women
in three different
companies
from 1975 to 2015, with data provided at selected intervals.
Overall
, there was a notable increase in the representation of
women
in senior management across all three
companies
over the four-decade period.
However
, the rate of increase in Eldan
Ltd
was the most highest propotion.
Company
Eldan
Ltd
,
in contrast
to other
companies
, had lower initial figures, with only 3% in 1975.
However
, it experienced more significant growth by 1985, reaching 64% in 2015. In
Company
Bamforth
Ltd
, the percentage of
women
in senior management started at 9% in 1975.
This
figure showed a steady increase over the years, reaching 46% by 2015. The largest growth occurred between 2000 and 2015, when the proportion rose from 17% to 46%.
Company
Finsbury
Ltd
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Ltd's
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trend differed markedly, with
women
holding 16% of senior roles in 1975, which was the highest among the three
companies
. But in
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decade
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the propotion
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propotion
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proportion
promotion
of
women
experienced
tiny
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a tiny
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decrease. In 2015
this
company
reached 26% which shows that
women
's participation in
this
company
was the lowest.
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