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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about various components
such
 as
It
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the It
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industry
 and
Service
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the Service
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industry
 of
Gdp
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GDP
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 in
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 between 1992 and 2000. One striking
feauture
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feature
 of the chart is that,the
rates
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rate
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 components in
It
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the It
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industry
 experienced an upward trend
while
service
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the service
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industry
 showed a downward trend in the
period
 given.Both industries'
components
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component
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 rates had some fluctuations.
Furthermore
,they had the most significant difference in GDP in the
period
. The
precentage
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percentage
 of
It
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the It
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industry
 in
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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experienced
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was
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 about 7% in 1992,higher than almost 3%
service
industry
.It
increase
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increased
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just
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 over 8% in 1994 before
decrease
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decreasing
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 to under 8% in 1996.In 1998,it
increase
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increased
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 sharply to 12 and continued
increase
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to increase
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steadliy
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steadily
 to the end of the
period
,reaching over 14% in 2000.
On the other hand
,the rates of
service
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the service
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industry
 witnessed 4% in 1992 before
increase
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increasing
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 to over 6% in 1994.In 1996,
service
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the service
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industry
increase
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increased
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 tiny to about 7% and it continued
increase
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to increase
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 slowly to the end of
period
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the period
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,reaching almost 8% in 1998 and hitting a high point of about 8% in 2000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words industry, service, period, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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