The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016.

The pie chart illustrates how the amount of money was earned and expended annually by a children’s charity in the USA in 2016. Looking at an
overall
structure, it is readily apparent that the majority of revenue comes from donated food,
while
government grants and investment income represent the smallest portion of all revenues. In terms of spending, program services come
first,
while
the least amount of money goes to management and general
expenditure
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. In detail, in 2016, donated food accounted for most of the earnings,
represented
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86.6%.
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, program services comprised the main portion of expenditures, making up 95.8% of the total outlays for that year. The other categories contributed a small portion of both receipts and
spendings
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. Community contributions were the second source after donated food, accounting for 10.4% in that year, followed by program revenue, at 2.2%. Other income sources, including investment income and government grants, made up only 0.8% of earnings. Expenditures consisted of only two other categories: fundraising and management and general, which amounted to 2.6% and 1.6% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising events
  • expenditure
  • administration costs
  • program expenses
  • direct benefits
  • indirect benefits
  • underprivileged children
  • education
  • healthcare
  • shelter
  • nourishment
  • medical treatments
  • basic needs
  • financial sustainability
  • transparency
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