The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year,

2016.
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The pie chart illustrates how the amount of money was earned and expended annually by a children’s charity in the USA in 2016. Looking at an
overall
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structure, it is readily apparent that the majority of revenue comes from donated food,
while
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government grants and investment income represent the smallest portion of all revenues. In terms of spending, program services come
first,
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while
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the least amount of money goes to management and general
expenditure
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. In detail, in 2016, donated food accounted for most of the earnings,
represented
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86.6%.
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, program services comprised the main portion of expenditures, making up 95.8% of the total outlays for that year. The other categories contributed a small portion of both receipts and
spendings
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. Community contributions were the second source after donated food, accounting for 10.4% in that year, followed by program revenue, at 2.2%. Other income sources, including investment income and government grants, made up only 0.8% of earnings. Expenditures consisted of only two other categories: fundraising and management and general, which amounted to 2.6% and 1.6% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising events
  • expenditure
  • administration costs
  • program expenses
  • direct benefits
  • indirect benefits
  • underprivileged children
  • education
  • healthcare
  • shelter
  • nourishment
  • medical treatments
  • basic needs
  • financial sustainability
  • transparency
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