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The chart below shows the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world

The chart below shows the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world
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The provided charts give information about how much
water
 was used for different purposes
six
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in six
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areas
 of the world.
Namely north
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Namely North
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America
, south
America
,
Europe
, Africa, central
Asia
 and
south east
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Southeast
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Asia
.
Overall
, it
is obviously see
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 that the most popular
use
 of
water
 is agricultural for
forth
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fourth
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areas
, except
north
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North
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America
 and
eurpoe
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Europe
,
while
 industrial
use
 is popular in
Europe
 and
north
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North
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America
. Getting back to the details in
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the forth
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forth
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fourth
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areas
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area
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 the vast majority
percentages
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of percentages
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 are agricultural
use
. In
north
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North
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America
 and
Europe
is
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the first popular
use
 of
water
 is industrial
use
. The figures are 48% and 53% respectively. Agricultural
water
use
 in both
areas
 is the same percentage at about two-fifths of a
percent
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per cent
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.The least popular
use
 of
water
 is domestic
use
 in six regions. The figures in Africa, Central
Asia
 and Southeast
Asia
 combined are 25%.
Comparison
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In comparison
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 with these three regions,
in
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North
America
, South
America
 and
Europe
use
 twice as much
water
 for domestic
use
. The segments account for 13%, 19% and 15% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, areas, america, europe, asia, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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