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The chart below shows numbers of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows numbers of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the participation in various sports which happens in specific
area
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areas
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 in1997 and 2017. There were 7 sports
like
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(Tennis, basketball, cricket, golf, swimming, football and Rugby) in the bar chart where the participants
play
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played
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in
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at
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 different
time
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times
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. Among all the sports, tennis was the
highly
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most
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 participated game in both
year
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years
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 among adults which
is
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was
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 50,000 in 1997 and 55,000 in 2017
comapred
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compared
 to basketball which was played less around 8000
people
 attended in 1997 and 22,000
people
 in 2017. Cricket was played more in 1997 which presents that approximately
avobe
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25,000
people
 played
this
 game but there is a drastic decline shown in 2017 which is below 10,000.
On the other hand
,
Foodball
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Football
 has seen a significant increase in 2017 than 1997. In 2017, grown up over 40,000
people
 attended
in
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football play.
Similar
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A similar
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 case is seen in
Rugby
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the Rugby
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 game;
people
 got more interested in 2017. Golf and Swimming
has
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 not changed much in these years. There were above 30,000
people
 who played in both games in
this
 time span.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • adult demographic
  • comparison
  • percent change
  • significant increase/decrease
  • trend analysis
  • sports popularity
  • ranking changes
  • general patterns
  • social factors
  • 20-year period
  • time span
  • major sports
  • data interpretation
  • highlight features
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