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The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the variation in different clothing exports from three countries
such
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 as Myanmar, Cambodia and Japan
in
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 1999 to 2003 . The units are measured in millions of
dollar
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dollars
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. In 1993, Myanmar
has seen
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a
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an
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expotential
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exponential
 increase in
export
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exports
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 which
is
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was
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 800
million
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dollar
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 and it
continues
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continued
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 to rise in 2001 which reached above 900
million
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. But suddenly it plunged to below 400
million
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 in 2002. After
that
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 there is a slight increase which is above 400million in 2003. Japan has seen a substantial decrease in the year 2000 than 1999 from 600million to 500million.
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 it
has
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experienced an increase in 2001 which
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600million
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600 million
, but after
that
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 it levelled off in 2003 which
has
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reached below
500million
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500 million
. Cambodia has experienced an upward trend from 1999 to 2022 which is from 450
million
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 to 700
million
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then
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 it slightly dripped off and reached at 600million in 2003.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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