Public transport should be funded by the government so that it can be free for people who use it. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

#transport #government #people #disagree？

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people

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believed

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that

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the government

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government

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responsible for the

avability

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availability

of public transport. In

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essay

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I will explain two reasons why I agree

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statement. On the one hand, free public

transports

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have many advantages for

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apply

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society so the government should allocate their budget to it.

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benefit of public

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transports

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transport

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is that it

help

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to reduce traffic in important parts of the city.

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, it would reduce the time needed to travel from one place to another and it could help

people

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to allocate their time better.

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, electric trains could decrease the carbon footprint

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lead

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to better air and

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, by using free buses or trains,

people

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not need to spend their money to buy a car or motorcycle so they

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spend it

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another matters

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, it is important for the authority to make free public

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transports

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transport

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as it could raise

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people

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willingness to use it.

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, mass

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transports

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transport

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built by a private

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might lead to a big problem. The lack of regulation will leave the

company

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to set the price as they please without the

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consequence

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of giving sufficient security and good facility.

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, once in my hometown in Indonesia, there was a public transport operated by

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company

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called 'Angkot', a modified car enough for 10 to 12 passengers and

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short trips. It has

pricing

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problem that keeps on

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, there are no serious

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to solve its

thieves

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problem as the

company

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and the authority didn't care much.

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, public transportations have economic and

environment

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benefits for society. It

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also needs

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need full support from the regulator as being controlled by private sectors is not favourable.

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introduction

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examples

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language usage

Ensure consistent use of verb forms and subject-verb agreement, such as "people does not" which should be "people do not."

structure

Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing your arguments.

structure

The body paragraphs are logically structured and each supports a clear main idea.

content

You have done well to address both sides of the argument, acknowledging potential issues with privately funded transport.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

291 words

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Public transport should be funded by the government so that it can be free for people who use it. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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The massive movement of people from agricultural areas to cities in search of employment can lead to serious problems in both places. What are the problems, and how can these be solved?

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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