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The three pie charts below shows the chnages in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001.

The three pie charts below shows the chnages in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001.
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The charts represent the
propotion
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proportion
 of UK
schools
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' spending in several sectors in three
decade
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 starting from 1981 to 2001. In 1981,
schools
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 spent 40% of
its
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their
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 income
for
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on
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teachers
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'
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salary
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salaries
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,
this
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 was the highest spending in 1981, followed by workers'
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salary
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salaries
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, which
were
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 28%. They only spent 15% on books, furniture, and equipment.
Schools
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 only spent 2%
for
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on
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insurace
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insurance
, which was the lowest spending among other sectors. A decade later, half of the
schools
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' spending was
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teachers
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'
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salary
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salaries
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, yet, they decreased workers'
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salary
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salaries
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 to 22%. The percentage of spending on books increased to 20%. On the other side, the spending on furniture and equipment had declined by 10%. The
schools
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 increased
its
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 spending on insurance by 1%.
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, in 2001, the proportion of
teachers
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'
salary
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 had decreased by 5% and workers'
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salary
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salaries
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 by 7%. Spending on resources had declined by 11%.
Nonetheless
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, spending on furniture and equipment had drastically increased to 23%. There was a slight
increased
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on
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in
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 insurance, which had a rate
8
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of 8
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%.
To sum up
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, there
had
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 been some changes in
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schools
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schools'
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 annual spending.
Nevertheless
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, most spending was
for
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on
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teachers
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'
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salary
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salaries
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 and they had the least spending
for
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on
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 insurance.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, teachers, salary with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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