Children are facing more pressures from academic, social and commercial sources. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce it?

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It is true that nowadays young people experience more stress in schools and society and from commercials.

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have, including

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competitive

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daily advertisements

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as schools

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understanding

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government

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regarding

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advertisements that

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children

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try to be more successful in academic areas. They need to get high band scores because it

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their future to

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in a good

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university

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score and 20% would be the high school results. Another problem is that people

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social media share their top moments and they rarely post sad memories.

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Instagram mostly post their meals at expensive restaurants.

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industry

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earn more benefits fond it easy to work on

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children

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. so they focus

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commercial video clips to influence

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we can see that

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produces mobiles named "Yungi". To

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address

these issues schools should use schemes that encourage

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to get deep

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them to get a better job.

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engineering

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fields

companies hire

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people

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physical

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not good grades in academic fields. To

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avoid

immense comparison with other

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children

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that families

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from childhood to

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don't have

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challenges in adulthood.

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should implement policies that limit

advertisments

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

330 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

academic pressure
peer pressure
consumer culture
high expectations
mental health support
mindfulness programs
stress-relief
extracurricular activities
unrealistic standards
social media influence
advertising targeting
mental health education

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Children are facing more pressures from academic, social and commercial sources. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce it?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their childen to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. [800]

Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, explain why you have changed your job describe your new job tell him/her your other news Write at least 150 words