The map below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given maps provide information about the current layout and
upcoming
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proposal of
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slip
Islip
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center
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is elucidated by given maps
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, by having a cursory glance
in
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map
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the map
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, it can be clearly seen that
their
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are various
modification
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modifications
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and urbanization in which the introduction of
car
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park
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parks
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and bus
station
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stations
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are
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the most significant developments.
Acoording
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According
to the maps , the area has gradually changed and a lot of
building
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buildings
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will be modified .
Whole
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center
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will be surrounded by
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carriageway and the main road
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.
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, the shops that
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in
north
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and south of
main
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road will
merged
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and become one big
shop
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center . Another striking Chang
a
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lot of new houses
wil
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will
built
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be built
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and pedestrians will be
constructe
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constructed
.
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,
new
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car park and bus station will be built in
north
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the north
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diraction
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direction
and
besid
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beside
the new housing . The good and important thing school and park
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at
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the same place without no Chang .
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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