Some people believe that global warming is today’s most pressing environmental problem. At the same time, some consider deforestation to have the most devastating impact on the world. Discuss both views and give your opinion on the same.

Nowadays, it is believed that the constantly growing temperatures are the most important environmental problem. I tend to think that
destruction
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the destruction
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of forest
areas
can be much more dangerous for humankind. In
this
essay, I will discuss both of them and introduce my opinion
at the end
.
Firstly
,
elimination
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the elimination
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of forests can cause
extinction
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the extinction
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of
variuos
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various
types of animals. Some of them
ajust
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are
better to the constantly changing environment,
while
the
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apply
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others can extinct.
For instance
, birds can change
there
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their
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area of
existance
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existence
,
while
the
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mammals,
such
as
deers
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deer
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or rabbits can not do
this
easily.
Secondly
,
due to
the destruction of forests
areas
for hunting and
fruts
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fruits
fruit
gathering will
also
be missed. That will negatively affect locals
,
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because they will have not enough food or their
moneyflow
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money
will be harmed. Based on my experience, my grandma was always gathering
the
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mushrooms during the summers. But because of
constantly
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the constantly
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growing
city
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city,
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she is unable to do
this
now. Because of
that
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that,
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she
need
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to spend more money on food.
On the other hand
,
melting
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the melting
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of ice on the south and north poles can cause constant
floodings
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flooding
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across the
word
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world
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. It will not only be destructive for the people living near the watersides but
also
for the animals and plants growing in
this
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these
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areas
.
For example
, scientists say that in the span of 100
years
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years,
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the level of oceans will rise drastically.
This
will cause enormous
enviromental
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environmental
damage
especially
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, especially
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for the small islands.
To conclude
, I think both of
this
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these
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problems are very important. But it is essential for humankind right now to fight deforestation and help locals and animals living in
this
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these
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areas
.
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Clear introduction and conclusion that outlines your opinion effectively.
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Discussion of both viewpoints is well-presented, demonstrating an understanding of the topic.
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  • for instance
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  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global warming
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Fossil fuels
  • Rising sea levels
  • Polar ice caps
  • Extreme weather events
  • Deforestation
  • Habitat loss
  • Biodiversity hotspots
  • Water cycle disruption
  • Carbon storage
  • Catastrophic climate events
  • Ecosystems
  • Global economy disruption
  • Urgent collaboration
  • Policy-making
  • Climate change mitigation
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