The table below shows how many students of a school in the UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011.
The chart illustrates the count of participating in four different sports in a UK school between 2002 and 2011 by students.
It is notable,
football
has Correct word choice
that football
been
kept Unnecessary verb
apply
own
popularity Correct pronoun usage
its own
between
students. Change preposition
among
However
, basketball faced big
fall starting Correct article usage
a big
of
2007.
It is obvious, Change preposition
in
take
Wrong verb form
taking
parting
in running was raised year by year. Participating in running was about 19 in 2001, but after 10 years Change the form of the verb
part
this
indicator was 60. Rate
of swimming was as running in 2001 and increased as running. Unlike running, Correct article usage
The rate
this
number was resemble
in 2011 as Change the verb form
was resembled
2001
.
Change preposition
in 2001
On the other hand
, basketball was famous in this
school. This
continued until 2006. In 2001 participating was aproximettly
55. Correct your spelling
approximately
This
rate was declined 2 times in 2011. Some little changes occurred in football across 10 years and there were not any big falls and rises. It maintained its rates.Submitted by i.nureddinn on
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