The table below shows how many students of a school in the UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011.

The chart illustrates the count of participating in four different sports in a UK school between 2002 and 2011 by students. It is notable,
football
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that football
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has
been
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apply
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kept
own
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its own
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popularity
between
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among
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students.
However
, basketball faced
big
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a big
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fall starting
of
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in
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2007. It is obvious,
take
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taking
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parting
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part
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in running was raised year by year. Participating in running was about 19 in 2001, but after 10 years
this
indicator was 60.
Rate
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The rate
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of swimming was as running in 2001 and increased as running. Unlike running,
this
number
was resemble
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was resembled
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in 2011 as
2001
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in 2001
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.
On the other hand
, basketball was famous in
this
school.
This
continued until 2006. In 2001 participating was
aproximettly
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approximately
55.
This
rate was declined 2 times in 2011. Some little changes occurred in football across 10 years and there were not any big falls and rises. It maintained its rates.
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