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The graph below shows the percentage of the Australian workforce in five industries between 1962 and 2012.

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The following graph shows the percentage of the Australian workforce, broken down into five different industries, over a 50-year period from 1962 to 2012.
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, it is clearly observed that
service
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 sectors experienced
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upward growth,
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manufacturing and agriculture underwent a downward trend.
However
, the remaining two sectors remained stable across five decades. In 1962, a closer look at the line graph
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 that
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at
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about 52% of Australians worked in Services which was the highest
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 among all other types of
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, followed by Manufacturing at nearly half of its figure at 26%.
While
 Mining accounted for the lowest percentages at about 1%, the other two groups were much larger at 9% in Construction and 11% in Agriculture. It is noticeable that Australian employees in Service rose at a constant rate and reached its peak in
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 2000s before
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 stable. Manufacturing, on
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 hand, fluctuated over time with
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%
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 fall and
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 and gradually declined to 10% in 2012. Agricultural-wise
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 experienced
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 1-2%
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 during the first half and plummeted to 5% in the second half. Constructions remained constant at 9-10% and so did Mining at 2-3%.
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