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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line chart illustrates the immigrant
people
 from village to city areas divided into three countries and forecasts for 2025.
Overall
, at
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a glance
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glance
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glance,
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 there were three countries
that
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where
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 the population movement from rural to urban, it can be seen that Indonesia was the lowest country that
people
 immigrated and forecasted remain stable,
while
 Russia and Iran
was
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were
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 the highest countries that
people
 immigrated and predicted increase in the end of period. In 2000, the
Iran
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Iran's
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populations
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population
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around
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was around
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below
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apply
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10
millions
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million
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, and
then
 slowly increased in 2005
around
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to around
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 10
millions
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million
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, and
significant
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significantly
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rised
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rise
raised
rises
 around below
than
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apply
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40
millions
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million
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,
besides
 that
its
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is
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 predicted still increase
until
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by
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 2025
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to around
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around
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to
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morethan
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more than
 90
millions
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million
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 and
exceeded
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exceed
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Russia
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Russian
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people
. Meanwhile, Russia overtakes in 2000 around more than 10
millions
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million
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,
besides
significant
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a significant
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increased
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increase
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 until 2015 and predicted still increase
at the end
 of
period
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the period
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about
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by about
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 under 90
millions
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million
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.
On the other hand
, around 10
millions
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million
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 Indonesian
people
moving
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moved
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 from rural to urban in 2000, and still increased
until
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to
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 2020 about 30
millions
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million
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, and predicted still remain stable in 2025.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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