Nowadays, humans are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

Rubbish
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issue is becoming more challenging in
todays
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today's
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life. People
are increasingly produce
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are increasingly producing
are increasingly produced
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waste. I believe
this
happens because of
consume
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culture and
also
large
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the large
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packaging that
companies
provide with their
products
.
In addition
, the government should implement the policies that control
this
problem. In my opinion,
peopele
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people
produce more waste rather than in the past because they purchase almost everything they can afford.
This
consume
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culture
are
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is
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created by social media and
advertising
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the advertising
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industry.
Companies
try to viral using their
products
in order to earn more income.
For
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a large part of society
buy
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buys
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new furniture even
the
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if the
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old ones are comfortable and work properly. I think
this
kind of look to spend our
mony
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money
need
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needs
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to be overviewed. Another factor that the amount of rubbish
are
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is
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increasing is the size of packaging.
Companies
find that how a product looks, effect the
buyers
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buyer's
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decision. so they release their
products
in large colorful packages to market even if they can fit perfectly in smaller packages. I believe
businnesses
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businesses
have a social responsibility
beside
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besides
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making money for themselves.
For instance
, they can put their
products
in
nature friendly
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materials that influence less
the
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apply
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nature than plastic, and if it
would be
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is
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possible, the package sizes should be smaller. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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we should not overlook the role of the government
to reduce
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in reducing
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these problems. In terms of the culture, they can
coorporate
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cooperate
with animation
companies
and order short video clips which encourage people to buy the
products
that are highly needed. Another policy they can take
,
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is to support the
bussinneses
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businesses
that produce
ther
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their
products
in smaller packaging sizes that are more
nature friendly
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nature-friendly
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simultaniously
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simultaneously
.
For
example
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such
factories can
recieve
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receive
subsides
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subsidies
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to take
this
action. In conclusion,
while
both people and
companies
can take part
to address
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this
challenge, the government can reduce
this
problem by
implement
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implementing
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the right schemes in order, to encourage both humans and
businnesses
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businesses
to solve
this
.
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Clarify some of the key points to make your response more comprehensive. For instance, further elaborate on how social media directly influences consumer behavior.
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You do well in addressing both parts of the task: why rubbish production is increasing and what governments can do to help reduce it.

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