The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart shows in which location of an Australian town dance

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are being held, and the bar chart illustrates the number of attendees.

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private studios are the most common location for dance

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, ballet is the most popular type with young people under 11,

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children between 11 and 16 would rather participate in modern dance

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. As depicted in the pie chart, private studios accommodate almost half of the

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town. School halls, which have after-school programs, and community halls and other places account for almost 20 per cent of the courses.

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, the fewest ones (at 10%) are in college-based studios. It can be seen that

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Ballet which is the most popular kind among children under 11, is the least favourable for participants between 11 and 16, respectively 600 and 300 pupils. The opposite pattern goes for the modern type.

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it has the most number of participants between 11 and 16, it is the least liked by applicants under 11 (500 and 300 in respective order). Tap kind receives almost the same number among the two groups (about 450).

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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4 paragraphs

191 words

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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passenger. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend on other things benefit the nation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is it a positive or negative development in your opinion?

Write a letter to the hotel, making the arrangements. In your letter •tell them when you will be arriving and leaving •explain what type of rooms you would like, and ask how much the weekend will cost •ask about activities and places of interest near the hotel