The line graph shows the number of people moving from rural to urban areas from 2000 to 2025.
The given graph illustrates
the
how many Correct article usage
apply
millions
of people moved to cities from countryside
in three different countries from Add an article
the countryside
year
2000 to 2025.
Indonesia shows Change the article
the year
gradual
increase in the number of population moved to urban areas Add an article
a gradual
while
the increase in Russia and Iran
is characterized with
some Change preposition
by
flactuations
over time.
Correct your spelling
fluctuations
fluctuation
Although
Russia started in the
first place with 15 Correct article usage
apply
millions
in the beginning Change to singular
million
year
, it gave its place to Iran
in 2020 while
at 80 Correct word choice
apply
millions
and Russia ended to be Change to singular
million
at
second place Change preposition
in
by
10 Change preposition
with
millions
less than Change to singular
million
Iran
which had 95 million people moving away from rural areas.
2020 is also
a year
when Indonesian people stopped to migrate within country
at 30 million even though until Add an article
the country
a country
then
there was an increasing trend goung
on starting from Correct your spelling
going
year
2000 when it was 10 million.
Change the article
the year
Moreover
, althouth
Indonesians moving from Correct your spelling
although
countryside
to megapolises was more than Add an article
the countryside
migrating
Correct article usage
the migrating
Iran
population, they changed places in 2006 at the level of 15 millions
.Change to singular
million
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