The line graph shows the number of people moving from rural to urban areas from 2000 to 2025.

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how many

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of people moved to cities from

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in three different countries from

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2000 to 2025. Indonesia shows

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increase in the number of population moved to urban areas

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the increase in Russia and

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Russia started in

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first place with 15

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in the beginning

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, it gave its place to

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in 2020

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at 80

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second place

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less than

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which had 95 million people moving away from rural areas. 2020 is

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when Indonesian people stopped to migrate within

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at 30 million even though until

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2000 when it was 10 million.

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to megapolises was more than

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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, year, iran with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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5 paragraphs

162 words

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