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The line graph shows the number of people moving from rural to urban areas from 2000 to 2025.

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The given graph illustrates
the
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how many
millions
 of people moved to cities from
countryside
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the countryside
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 in three different countries from
year
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the year
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 2000 to 2025. Indonesia shows
gradual
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a gradual
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 increase in the number of population moved to urban areas
while
 the increase in Russia and
Iran
 is characterized
with
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 some
flactuations
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fluctuations
fluctuation
 over time.
Although
 Russia started in
the
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first place with 15
millions
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 in the beginning
year
, it gave its place to
Iran
 in 2020
while
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at 80
millions
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million
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 and Russia ended to be
at
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in
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 second place
by
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with
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 10
millions
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million
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 less than
Iran
 which had 95 million people moving away from rural areas. 2020 is
also
 a
year
 when Indonesian people stopped to migrate within
country
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the country
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 at 30 million even though until
then
 there was an increasing trend
goung
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going
 on starting from
year
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 2000 when it was 10 million.
Moreover
,
althouth
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although
 Indonesians moving from
countryside
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the countryside
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 to megapolises was more than
migrating
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the migrating
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Iran
 population, they changed places in 2006 at the level of 15
millions
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million
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, year, iran with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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