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The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in canada and australia.

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in canada and australia.
#news #canada #australia
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The pie charts represent with of accessing the news in Two countries
named
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Canada and Australia
Overall
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While
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 most
of
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canadian
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Canadian
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 people
accessed
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access
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 through
Tv
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TV
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however
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 Australian people
accessed
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access
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 online.
In contrast
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 both
of
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countries least used category not specified.
To begin
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with
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 the largest category in Canada was TV at
fourty
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forty
four
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percent
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per cent
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,
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however
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however,
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 the smallest one was not specified
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at
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3
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percent
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per cent
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. People who accessed the news online were 36
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percent
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per cent
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. The indexes of categories named print were 14 and seven
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per cent
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percent
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 respectively. Regarding
to
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Australia the largest category was online at 52
precent
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per cent
.
Whereas
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smallest
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the smallest
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were
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was
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 Radio and weren't specified at just
same
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the same
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 level
2
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of 2
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%.Persons who
get
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received the news TV were just 37
precent
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per cent
.
Then
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 the figure
of
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 print was just 7
precent
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per cent
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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