The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
The given graph provides data from a 2008 report about
the
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enargy
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energy
usage in the United States of America since 1980 with predictions until 2030.
Overall
, as can be seen,
Petrol
and
Oil
has
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the most consumption .
Also
, all of them have
a
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upward
trend
except for
Hydropower
. Looking more closely at the
trend
,
it is clear that
from 1980 until 1985,
Hydropower
, Solar/
Wind
, Nuclear, and Coal had a gradual rise
while
Natural
Gas
and
Petrol
and
Oil
decreased
gradualy
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gradually
and reached
to
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their trough. Between 1985 and 1990, all of them rocketed. After that, Solar/
Wind
and
Petrol
and
Oil
declined
however
Hydropower
, Nuclear, and Coal
grown
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followed their growth and Natural
Gas
stood
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stable.
Although
,
Hydropower
had a
deramatic
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dramatic
decline in 2000, the trends of
Petrol
and
Oil
, Natural
Gas
, Nuclear, and Solar/
Wind
show that a minimal rise
happend
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happened
. The
trend
of Coal and Solar/
Wind
reveal
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that they will have a steady pattern in 2010. Natural
Gas
, Coal,
and
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Petrol
and
Oil
will have a gentle increase and others will have a period of stability until 2025. The Solar/
Wind
and Nuclear will have experienced a sharp peak,
however
, the rest will have followed their previous
trend
by 2030. In summary,
Hydropower
will have had the lowest use by 2030.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words petrol, oil, trend, hydropower, wind, gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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