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The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the
amount
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 of inhabitants, in millions, who migrated from rural areas to cities in three different nations,
in addition
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, is estimated how many more are going to do the same in 2025.
Overall
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, Indonesia, contrary to the other two, had shown a moderate rise,
while
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 in Russia and Iran, there has been a sharp increase in the number of
people
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 who moved to urban areas.
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, Indonesia from the beginning of the period until the end of it, had a steady upward trend.
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, is expected to reach a plateau in 2025 at about 30
million
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people
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.
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, the Indian population in the first five years was stable, but from
then
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 on increased vertiginously, reaching about 80
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at the end
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 of 2020.
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,
this
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 nation is the one where analysts think
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 number is going to enlarge even more in 2025
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 when roughly 95
million
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people
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 are forecast to move.
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, in Russia, the number of
people
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 who migrated has been rising,
consequently
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, in 2025 85
million
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 Russians are predicted to move.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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