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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the
amount
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 of inhabitants, in millions, who migrated from rural areas to cities in three different nations,
in addition
, is estimated how many more are going to do the same in 2025.
Overall
, Indonesia, contrary to the other two, had shown a moderate rise,
while
 in Russia and Iran, there has been a sharp increase in the number of
people
 who moved to urban areas.
Firstly
, Indonesia from the beginning of the period until the end of it, had a steady upward trend.
However
, is expected to reach a plateau in 2025 at about 30
million
people
.
Secondly
, the Indian population in the first five years was stable, but from
then
 on increased vertiginously, reaching about 80
million
at the end
 of 2020.
Furthermore
,
this
 nation is the one where analysts think
this
 number is going to enlarge even more in 2025
,
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 when roughly 95
million
people
 are forecast to move.
Lastly
, in Russia, the number of
people
 who migrated has been rising,
consequently
, in 2025 85
million
 Russians are predicted to move.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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