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The two maps illustrate the major changes in a harbour from 2000 to the present time. Overall, the port has undergone a significant development marked by the introduction of numerous amenities and the renovation of others. In 2000, the harbour was joinable from 2 entrances starting from the main road, which is located alongside the western edge of the map. However, another entrance has been settled in the recent plan. Indeed, a new entry was exclusively devoted to a large car park as well as an additional toilets and showers. Furthermore, the marina and its private yachts have taken a larger area in front of the new toilets whilst the fishing boats were permuted to the initial marina’s space in the 2000 port’s feature. Alongside the northern entry of the port, new docks and passenger ferries, located before arriving to the public beach, erected. On the other southern side, newly cafes and shops were constructed in addition to the replacement of the further eastern castle with a hotel.

The two maps illustrate the major changes in a harbour from 2000 to the present time. Overall, the port has undergone a significant development marked by the introduction of numerous amenities and the renovation of others. In 2000, the harbour was joinable from 2 entrances starting from the main road, which is located alongside the western edge of the map. However, another entrance has been settled in the recent plan. Indeed, a new entry was exclusively devoted to a large car park as well as an additional toilets and showers. Furthermore, the marina and its private yachts have taken a larger area in front of the new toilets whilst the fishing boats were permuted to the initial marina’s space in the 2000 port’s feature. Alongside the northern entry of the port, new docks and passenger ferries, located before arriving to the public beach, erected. On the other southern side, newly cafes and shops were constructed in addition to the replacement of the further eastern castle with a hotel.
The two maps illustrate the major changes in a harbour from 2000 to the present time.
Overall
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, the port has undergone a significant development marked by the introduction of numerous amenities and the renovation of others. In 2000, the harbour was joinable from 2 entrances starting from the main road, which is located alongside the western edge of the map.
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, another entrance has been settled in the recent plan. Indeed, a new entry was exclusively devoted to a large car park
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additional toilets and showers.
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, the marina and its private yachts have taken a larger area in front of the new toilets whilst the fishing boats were permuted to the initial marina’s space in the 2000 port’s feature. Alongside the northern entry of the port, new docks and passenger ferries, located before arriving
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 the public beach,
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. On the other southern side,
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 cafes and shops were constructed
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 to the replacement of the
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 eastern castle with a hotel.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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