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Writing Samples
Band 7

Write a letter to a local newspaper. In your letter: ointroduce yourself odescribe the importance of the park osay what action you will take if the council continues with its plan

Dear Sir/Madam, I hope my letter finds you well. I am Kajalpreet, a resident of Rose Society , which is located three blocks away from the park, which the Council is deciding to transfer to private hands. The entire population of our area embrace
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 public garden for various reasons. It is the meeting point for the elderly population to do yoga every morning, a playground for children and a gathering place for women in the evening.
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 parkland maintains a peaceful and fresh environment in our residence. I have scrutinised that all the residents take care of their cleanliness as well.
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, it is my humble request to avoid
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 action;
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 to assemble the residents from my block to make an appeal to city hall, which will imply legal actions against the council. It would be a great idea to publish
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 email, so as to gather public support and get opinions from the local inhabitants. Yours sincerely, Kajalpreet

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Try to add more details about why the park is important to the community.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure that each paragraph focuses on one main idea.
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Use a more formal opening and closing for your letter.
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You clearly explained the importance of the park.
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Your closing statement shows you care about the community.
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