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The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied bar chart indicates data about the number of global
population
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 and the
amount
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 of
invests
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 by area over the
period
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. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest proportion of
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population
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the population
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 includes China.
However
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, Rich Asia-Pacific has the lowest number of
population
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.
Moreover
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, the highest
amount
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 of
wealth
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 comprises
of
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North America.
Whilst
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apply
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, India
does
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has
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 not
contribute
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contributed
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 any global
invest
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investment
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 over the whole time. The
percentage
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 of global
wealth
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 is just over a third at 34% in North America, (which is the highest
amount
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 of
wealth
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 over the
period
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) just ahead of the proportion of world investment in Europe at precisely 30%.
Furthermore
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, the
percentage
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 of
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population
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the population
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 is approximately a quarter at 24% in China. (which is the highest
amount
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 of
population
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 over the whole year).
In contrast
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, the
percentage
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 of global richness is nearly 1% in
india
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India
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 and Africa. (which
are
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is
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 the lowest
amount
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 of world
wealth
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 over the
period
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).
Similarly
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, the number of
crwod
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crowd
 in North America is slightly as many as in Rich-Asia Pacific at 6% and 5%, respectively. (which are the lowest
percentage
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 of
population
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 over the
period
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).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, amount, period, wealth, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • global population
  • distribution of wealth
  • percentages
  • region
  • Asia
  • Africa
  • Europe
  • North America
  • South America
  • Oceania
  • disparity
  • account for
  • follow
  • despite
  • vary
  • demonstrate
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