The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.
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The given flow chart provides
the
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information about the procedure
by
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for
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the bricks which can produced for the building industry. there are nine steps of preparing the bricks before they are delivered.
The first step is
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when the
labors
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control the digger to dig the clay. After that, the clay is put in the metal grid to
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into smaller pieces before being on the roller to make it blend.
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, they mix the sand and water together.
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, it
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shaped in the mould or in the wire cutter to produce the bricks. The step
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this
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is drying open which would take around one or two days to dry it. Moving to the other stages, they put it in the kiln
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the
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moderate temperature which is about 200 to 980
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. After that, it put in the high temperature which is between 870 and 1300
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.
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, it takes around two or three days in the cooling chamber.
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, the product is packaged and ready to be delivered.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacture
  • bricks
  • building industry
  • process
  • dig
  • prepare
  • clay
  • mold
  • shape
  • dry
  • fire
  • kiln
  • cool
  • package
  • fired
  • overview
  • importance
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