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Proportion of household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment.

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portion
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a portion
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 of
households
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household
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 revenue from five countries in Europe
invest
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invested
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on
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in
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 accommodation ,clothing, entertainment,
food
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 with
beverage
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beverages
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.
Overall
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,the most spending categories in
France
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,
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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as well as
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Germany
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 is housing.
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,in
Turkey
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also
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Spain
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Spain's
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 use
on
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of
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food
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 and drinks the
highest
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most
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. For
food
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 and drinks the majority of it is in
Turkey
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 at 36%, secondary is in
Spain
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 much less than
Turkey
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5
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at 5
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%.
France
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 has a
number
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 at a quarter which smaller than
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UK
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the UK
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 at two
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percent
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per cent
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. The minority of
food
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 and drinks is in
Germany
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for
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apply
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22%. Next is
accommigation
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accommodation
, the highest used is in
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 (37%) which is 19% more than the least (
Spain
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).
France
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 is in the middle at 31%, it is two
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percent
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per cent
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 less than
Germany
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.
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Lastly
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Turkey
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 has a
number
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 at 20%. Clothing is the
bottom
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lowest
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 spend on every
categories
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category
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,
Germany
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use
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uses
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 the most in
this
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 at 15% which
nearly
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is nearly
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a
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apply
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double
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that from
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from
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of
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France
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.The percentage of
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UK
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the UK
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along with
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Turkey
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 are close at 11% and 12% respectively.
Spain
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spend
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spends
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 the least
in
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on
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this
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 at eight
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percent
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per cent
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.
Lastly
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 entertainment,all of the countries spend nearly. The highest
number
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 is in
Germany
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 at 19% which is nine
percent
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 greater than
Turkey
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.
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Uk
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UK
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waste
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wasted
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 one
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percent
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per cent
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 more than
Turkey
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made
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making
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 it the least used.
France
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 has a
number
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at
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of
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 13% which is two
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percent
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per cent
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 less than
Spain
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.

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structure
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content
Refine the introduction to be more engaging and informative. It should clearly state what the essay will cover.
content
Ensure that all main points are fully supported with clear examples and relevant data explanations.
content
The essay has attempted to cover all major points from the data provided.
language usage
Uses comparative language effectively to differentiate between data points (e.g., "Turkey...at 36%", "Spain...less than Turkey 5%").

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion
  • Household income
  • Allocate
  • Basic necessities
  • Expenditures
  • Essentials
  • Economy
  • Living conditions
  • Standard of living
  • Cultural significance
  • Leisure activities
  • Financial prioritization
  • Noticeable trends
  • Unusual allocations
  • Society's values
  • Economic status
  • Illustrates
  • Highlights
  • Comparison
  • Analyze
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