Proportion of household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment.

The given table represents
portion
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a portion
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of
households
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household
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revenue from five countries in Europe
invest
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invested
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on
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in
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accommodation ,clothing, entertainment,
food
with
beverage
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beverages
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.
Overall
,the most spending categories in
France
,
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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as well as
Germany
is housing.
In contrast
,in
Turkey
also
Spain
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Spain's
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use
on
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of
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food
and drinks the
highest
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most
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. For
food
and drinks the majority of it is in
Turkey
at 36%, secondary is in
Spain
much less than
Turkey
5
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at 5
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%.
France
has a
number
at a quarter which smaller than
UK
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the UK
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at two
percent
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per cent
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. The minority of
food
and drinks is in
Germany
for
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apply
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22%. Next is
accommigation
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accommodation
, the highest used is in
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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(37%) which is 19% more than the least (
Spain
).
France
is in the middle at 31%, it is two
percent
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per cent
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less than
Germany
.
Lastly
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Turkey
has a
number
at 20%. Clothing is the
bottom
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lowest
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spend on every
categories
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category
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,
Germany
use
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uses
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the most in
this
at 15% which
nearly
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is nearly
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a
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apply
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double
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that from
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from
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of
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France
.The percentage of
UK
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the UK
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along with
Turkey
are close at 11% and 12% respectively.
Spain
spend
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spends
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the least
in
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on
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this
at eight
percent
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per cent
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.
Lastly
entertainment,all of the countries spend nearly. The highest
number
is in
Germany
at 19% which is nine
percent
greater than
Turkey
.
Uk
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UK
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waste
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wasted
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one
percent
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per cent
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more than
Turkey
made
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making
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it the least used.
France
has a
number
at
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of
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13% which is two
percent
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per cent
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less than
Spain
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion
  • Household income
  • Allocate
  • Basic necessities
  • Expenditures
  • Essentials
  • Economy
  • Living conditions
  • Standard of living
  • Cultural significance
  • Leisure activities
  • Financial prioritization
  • Noticeable trends
  • Unusual allocations
  • Society's values
  • Economic status
  • Illustrates
  • Highlights
  • Comparison
  • Analyze
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