The charts below show the main reasons workers chose to work at home, and the hours males and females worked at home for the year 2005.

The charts below show the main reasons workers chose to work at home, and the hours males and females worked at home for the year 2005.
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The first diagram illustrates the reasons
men
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and women chose to work at
home
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in 2005.
Overall
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, running their own businesses was the main reason for both
males
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and
females
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(69% and 65% respectively).
In contrast
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, approximately a quarter of
males
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put flexibility as a reason, which was twice as high as the female responses (26% and 12% respectively). For childcare, the pattern was different again with almost a quarter of
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giving
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reason compared to very few
males
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(5%) The second diagram shows the
hours
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men
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and women worked at
home
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in 2005. The vast
maiority
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majority
of
males
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worked over _31
hours
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per week (82%) contrasting with a minority of
females
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(5%) doing similar
hours
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.
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pattern is reversed when examining the under ten
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category with almost
three quarters
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three-quarters
show examples
of
females
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working
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amount compared to only 2% of
males
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. The 10-30
hours
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per week category shows fewer marked differences.
To sum up
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, it can be seen that
men
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and women do not always give the same reasons for
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working and,
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in general
,
men
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work longer
hours
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at
home
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.
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