Nowadays young people have to make the decision about their future career. Some people, however, believe that teachers and parents can make a better choice for their future career. Discuss both options and include your opinion with relevant examples from your own experience.

In today's world, the choice of the future career path is up to young individuals.
On the contrary
,
according to
many, the decision about
career
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a career
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should be made by tutors and
parents
. Even though adults are more experienced
about
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life, from my perspective,
such
a significant decision should be determined by one themselves because they are responsible for their life. Being experienced, the directions of adults should not be overlooked.
This
is far more valid for youngsters. Since they have relatively narrower
perspective
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perspectives
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than
grown ups
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grown-ups
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, every
advice
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piece of advice
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is invaluable. They have been in a lot of different situations, whether it was good or bad. In
such
a context, asking second opinion
to
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them
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, particularly
to
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from
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parents
and teachers, about
everthing
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everything
is worthwhile, even when it comes to designing
future
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the future
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.
For instance
, they may suggest some professions since they know you. On the flip side,
although
parents
and teachers are experienced,
carreer
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career
options should be considered by
one's
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one
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himself/herself on the grounds that, they will be the one who
face
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the consequences. Only
person
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a person
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can acknowledge own capability.
Additionally
, a misdirected individual may have to live with
wrong
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decision for a lifetime.
Therefore
, choosing what to do is only that
person
's concern. Take an engineer, who was directed by his family, as an example. That
person
neither enjoys the
live
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nor can he be productive at work. In conclusion, in spite of the fact that the view of
parents
and
tutor
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tutors
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is valuable when it comes to choosing
career
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a career
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,
this
choice must be made by
person
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the person
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himself.
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task achievement
Try to expand more on your ideas to provide a clear and comprehensive response. This could include elaborating on examples or considering additional perspectives.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next. Using linking words and phrases can strengthen the connection between ideas.
task achievement
You successfully included both perspectives in the discussion, addressing the prompt effectively.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly sets up the discussion, and the conclusion effectively summarizes your viewpoint.
task achievement
You provided a relevant example to support your argument, which strengthens your task response.

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