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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The line graph provides data about the proportion of the
population
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 in four Asian countries living in urban areas between 1970 and 2020, with a forecast for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, the proportion of the
Philippines
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'
population
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 living in cities was high at the beginning
while
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Indonesia
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's percentage was the lowest
however
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 it has outstripped the two country's percentages in 2000 and 2010. Another noticeable feature is that the patterns of all countries were erratic until 2010
then
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 started to grow steadily. To start with, in 1970 the proportions of the
Philippines
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' and Malaysia's
population
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 living in cities were above 30%
then
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 the latter rose considerably to 48% in 1990
although
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 the former outstripped after a slight increase in 1980, constituting 50% in 1990. Followed by, Thailand's and
Indonesia
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's percentages which began at under 20% after 30 years, their figures were equal, making up 29%. In 2010, Malaysia's figures continued climbing
while
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 the
Philippines
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 witnessed a slight decrease to 42% which allowed
Indonesia
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 to surpass its percentages, showing 45% respectively. In 2020, the share of all county's
population
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 experienced an upward trend. Regarding future predictions, the proportion of Malaysia's
population
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 living in cities is anticipated to surge substantially to above 80% by 2040. Followed by
Indonesia
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 and the
Philippines
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 which are expected to peak at above 50%.
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, figures for Thailand are going to increase steeply to 49% by 2040.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, philippines, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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