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Band 5

Task 2 To what extent has the internet made life more convenient? give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. write at lease 250 word.

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The Internet network was invented about 30 years ago, from that
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 up to now, we have seen so many changes in its shape, speed, quality and properties. If you had asked anyone 30 years ago about the internet invention and its purpose you wouldn't receive any clear answer at that
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. I guess none of us were aware
about
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 how
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 creature would change our life in future, but it did. Nowadays it’s really hard to even think about
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 single day in our life without connecting to websites. Undoubtedly surfing the web makes our life so much easier than before and I absolutely agree about
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 phenomenon. At the
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 I was a high school student the only facility which we had to search
about
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 our
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 and
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 were books or asking
from
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our parents to
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 our homework but today with the help of so many useful websites students can use their tablets, mobile phone or laptop to walk through the huge amount of information and find their answers. Even for older people at the office finding the related standard or latest paper around the web becomes very easier, convenient and more truthful than the
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 they should have ordered the paper version of those references. They can
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 use a digital type of mailing system, we named Email, to contact our colleagues, employees and customers at
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 glance. Today, our parents even use digital channels and forums to read about news, guides for using their new devices or even the recipe
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 apple pie. Among any mishaps which the internet may have, there are several useful benefits which can’t be neglected and now
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 the invention of AI
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new information and processed data are becoming more convenient than before.
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introduction conclusion
The introduction sets the context well, but try to make your thesis statement clearer, which directly responds to the question. This will help guide your essay more effectively.
logical structure
Although your paragraphs are logically organized, adding clear topic sentences at the beginning of each main paragraph can enhance coherence. This will also signal to the reader what to expect next.
relevant specific examples
The essay provides relevant and strong examples, like comparing the search for information during high school days with today, to support your points.
complete response
You have offered a comprehensive response to the task by discussing both youth and older generations, showing a good understanding of how the internet impacts different groups.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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